Hermione and I are in the same room and the boys are in the same group Gryffindor,but different dormitory.
“Good morning Hermione how was your night?”
"Good thank you , and you um um” ,
“Its Lightning, Violet Lightning”
“Let’s go get the boys up Violet”.
“Ok Hermione”.
“” BOYS GET UP!!!!!”.
“They are not getting up “.
“You know what to do right Violet”.
“ Punch ‘em”.
“Exactly Violet “.
“Ouch that hurt”.
“ Yes well get out of bed !”
“ Ok ok we're up “.
“Come on then let's go down to the forest and see what we can find”.
“Ok Violet”.
“I like this girl”. said Harry
“ Shh Ron”. said Hermione
“Wow what's that”. ,said Harry with his mouth wide open.
“It's a stairway to the sky” said Ron.
Similar comment to Mia's previous. Story on just dialog is really hard. It jumps and sounds forced. The ending is nice with Harry's expression described so we get the emotion of the event and Ron's Mr Obvious comment at the end is in his character
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